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"Come on, do it."
"No. I've been over this before. You don't get a say in the matter."
"Yeah but you do! And I know you want to. I've been in that head of yours, remember? I know exactly how much you really want to."
"Not as much as I don't want to. I've spent years pushing you away internally, don't think for a second just because you can bother me physically and audibly I'm going to give in now."
"Hmmm, want to bet? I'm physically here now, I'll make sleep even harder for you. I'll get on your phone when you aren't paying attention and drive your friends further away from you. I am still as everpresent as before, I'm just even better at making your life miserable now."
"You know what? You're right. You're not inside me anymore. But that's a good thing, because now I can really do something about you. I guess you are getting what you want, just partially."
I grab one of the kitchen knives from the block.
Nice. A story that's almost all good, natural-sounding dialogue, and the only description is also the climax. I think the lack of description really makes it feel immediate and snappy.
This is also definitely a fantasy that everyone who's struggled with negative thoughts can relate to.
Thanks! I'm not a writer but stumbled across the post and knew immediately I wanted to give this a shot.