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Poetry

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A community to celebrate published and OC works of poetry.


Welcome to !poetry


Guidelines & Community Rules

In addition to the general rules of lemmy.world:

Published Poetry

1a: Poetry posts should include the title and the author, when the author is known.

O.C. Poetry

2a: Sharing original poetry is encouraged, but it must be preceded by the tag "[OC]."

2b: If an [OC] post is requesting feedback, it should also follow with the "[FB]" tag. It would look like the following example:
[OC] [FB] Nothing Gold Can Stay

Feedback

All feedback should be given in good faith.

3a: All [FB] requests should be met with comments constructive in nature. It is okay to dislike parts of a poem, but make sure to explain why you feel that way.

3b: Feedback does not need to be extraordinary in nature. Simply expressing how a work makes you feel is often enough.

3c: Use the honor system. When you receive good feedback, return it in kind to another author. Everyone appreciates knowing their work is being read and appreciated.

As this community develops, these guidelines may be adjusted.


Formatting Help
Work in progress

To create a line break, use two spaces at the end of a line.

To create empty space, type  . Use four of these at the beginning of a line to create a standard indent.

UPDATE:
Some methods of access do not format markdown correctly. I am currently testing various apps and web interfaces to see what does and does not retain formatting.

In the interim, it is encouraged to post text poetry as you normally would, but to include a link at the beginning or end of the post with access to a website or image that retains the formatting as intended.


Other Poetry Communities
Poetry lovers unite! In the style of the fediverse, multiple poetry communities have arisen, and will continue to rise. I will try to keep a list here of communities across instances that are worth checking out!


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[–] nikita 3 points 8 months ago (3 children)

That last sentence is amazing. It is a perfect encapsulation of heartbreak and our attempts at love.

[–] [email protected] 3 points 8 months ago (2 children)

And doesn't the text kind of almost sound like he's been abusive but she wants the old him back? Or is it just me?

[–] nikita 2 points 8 months ago (1 children)

I think there are two meanings at play.

Maybe I’m going too deep into this but the part where she says he slapped the back of her can be interpreted as either an act enjoyment (of the sexual kind) or as an act of abuse. I think that line epitomises the theme of the poem, namely that there is a duality in romance. It is a relationship that is both perfect and imperfect, manic and depressing, reasonable and nonsensical.

At least that’s what I got out of it. Thank you for sharing.

[–] [email protected] 2 points 8 months ago

I agree. Like it could go either way. It's so good! I'm glad you like.